Valuable Tip

12th August

Robin, before I start critically commenting on your writings I must say your attempts are good. I liked the earlier story. I liked this blog as well.

However, I must once again draw your attention towards to serious construction flaws of your narration. 
I remember having mentioned this to you earlier as well and I find you repeating the mistake even now. 

The narration should flow smoothly in one tense. You either describe the events of past or you narrate those by converting the story in first person present. 

You can't witness something in present while narrating the action that happened in past. Just go through your narration when you see the old man climbing the stairs.

Switching the tense during while narrating a sequence is not only bad narration but also incorrect grammar. Please take care of that. 

You can definitely improve on this by reading good authors. Remember you can't become a good writer unless you become a very good reader. 

Best of luck. I will be looking forward to reading more from you. Power to your writing. God bless.

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